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Lets say if you owned your own company and I came nicely dressed and I speak professionally. Also based off my Resume... would you hire me? Some names and info has been changed for security reasons! Ariel L. Powell 1234 Fake Street Las Vegas, Nevada 89128 Powellariel@ymail.com Objective I am trying to get into an entry level position, where I can learn and be successful. I have experience as a cashier with the extreme addition of great customer service experience. I speak in a professional manner. I am easy going and love to meet new people. I attended 2 ½ years of German classes at Cheyenne High School, but need a little brushing up on my skills. I also took creative writing courses in high school. One of my career objectives is to become a film director. I have over a year of experience in this area as I also had a class in high school on Broadcast Journalism. Relevant Skills - Proficient in Windows 95/98/NT, PowerPoint 4.0, Word Perfect 6.1, Excel, Microsoft Word - Accustomed to heavy telephone usage - Experience dealing with customers in a professional manner - Typing: 45 wpm Employment History Cameo Kayser & Associates, Court Reporting Secretary/Assistant – October 2007 through June 2008 I scheduled depositions with law firms in the Las Vegas area. I also scheduled court reporters for depositions and used several different legal computer applications such as Acclaim and Real Legal Wal-Mart Neighborhood Store, Grocery Store Cashier/Sales Associate/Produce Stocker – April 2006 through September 2007 I helped customers find, obtain and pay for what they needed. I completed numerous financial transactions. I moved through several different departments as I liked learning different departments throughout the store. Eduardo & Patricia Velasco, neighbors Dog/House Sitter – August 2005 through January 2006 (intermittent) I fed and cared for their animals. The house was clean and watched after while they were traveling and/or on vacation. Patricia McCrea, neighbor Dog/House Sitter – June 2004 through December 2005 (intermittent) I secured her house while she was on vacation. The animals were cared for and well fed. I also cleaned the house for my employer. Education June 2007High School Graduate Cheyenne High School Las Vegas, Nevada References Professional Heather Sullivan, Secretary Cameo Kayser & Associates Personal Jamie Pool Cosmetologist, commission Kyle Schnyder, Tech Support Cox Communications

Public Comments

1. This resume isn't formatted right. You're objective should never be more than 1 line long. You know what i did, i have Microsoft word 2007 and they have resume template you can download online, Im going to give you all the links and then you download it and put your information in. I will try to see if i can fix this resume ok, ok this is what i got. excuse the format cause Yahoo answers made it print up funny but the content is correct. im going to put it on my yahoo 360. go to my account and click on 360 it's too long to post here.
2. okay first off shorten the objective way too long and never include references , only state on your resume that references are available upon request . remember the employer does not have all day to read your resume nor does he want too . not trying to be rude here just honest .
3. No, I would not because your resume is not in a "proper" resume format. Since I would expect the people that I hire to be "detail oriented", I would expect them to check into the details of how a resume should be written. I would expect that a person applying would have researched how to write a resume before writing their resume and applying for the job. Parts of your resume are fine, however your "objectives" section needs some work. A potential employer is not interested in your ultimate dreams (film director). An employer is interested in whether you are interested enough in the job they are offering to do a great job for them. You objective should reflect an eagerness to get the job that the employer has open. If the job is widget maker, then your objective is to be the world's best widget maker. Also you use the pronoun "I" far too often. Anybody reviewing your resume already knows that it is "all about you". To use the word "I" so often (or at all really) is not only annoying but it shows that you didn't even take the time to research how a properly written resume is written. It says to me that you didn't care enough to to give me a great "first impression" of you (that is what a resume is- a first impression). If you don't care about the first impression, why would you care enough to do a good job? You sound like a very eager, ambitious young person with a great future ahead of you. Invest in yourself by taking the time to learn how to present yourself in the best possible light. That includes a correctly written resume. It takes a little time, but you are worth it.
4. I concur, your objective (or Personal statement) is too long and contains irrelevant/repeated information. I've edited it a bit, you don't have to use it but i thought it might help a little bit. I am trying to get into an entry level position, where I can learn and be successful. I have experience in customer service and have excellent communication skills. One of my career objectives is to become a film director and have studied towards this goal during school. I'm not sure of 'one of my career objectives...'. This seems like you don't have a one track minded objective. Instead you could say 'I am pursuing work in the film industry but I also enjoy retail'. My personal statement says 'I enjoy retail but I am passionate about working with young people'. Under your education you can put subjects you majored in, don't include them in the objective. Include learning german in your education but don't say you need brushing up - this is a negative spin on things, plus I'm sure it'll come back when you start using it again. Also, when you describe your work, make sure it is limited to two lines AT THE VERY MOST. eg: Wal-Mart Neighborhood Store, Grocery Store Cashier/Sales Associate/Produce Stocker – April 2006 through September 2007 Duties included: cash handling, customer service, working various departments inluding ___ ___ and ____. You don't need to include the date you started.
5. I would expand on the educational part of your CV and make it more from the third person. Not "I Helped customers" just "helped customers" and so on
6. OK your typing up your resume as if you where sending a letter to a high school friend, it has to be more business like, less friendly, more professional Example - Objective My objective is to not only utilize the skills, education and experience I already posses but to expand upon them in a business environment. Quickly able to adjust and adapt to changing business environments, and needs I believe I would be a great asset to any organization. The addition of being bi-lingual greatly enhances my abilities to help the company grow internationally.